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You are clever at making the
Posted on Mon, 30 Aug 2021
You are clever at making the reader feel your story is true! not the ones about the pm obv. :0)
should it be storey? "Story after wooden story took the construction to new heights. "
"She smiles (thinly) spins and twirls," seems sad? Is it because she is trapped doing the same dance over and over, like a doorkeeper into magic, so though she seems fragile is powerful. But longs to have wings be in the place she guards?
If so much in a conciousness is inherent instinct, there must be connection with those sharing that instinct in the present, I like how you say "a surge of the energy of one" and maybe too with those who passed the instinct down. In such brief...
How you have broken up sentences makes words seem frightening, like falling through ice and the bits are all sharp, where once skated effortlessly. Even the rhythm jars in your poem, adds to the fear. I am so sorry about your father, it is aweful...
Ah, did wonder about that, they are a great advert for a Creator though, aren't they? Would be easy to think of how amazing a Creator must be, when thinking of those colours :0) The thing is, idols are man made, second hand gods, and birds aren't...
they are so BEAUTIFUL! I had never heard of them, those COLOURS! It seems specisist to me, that it might be a sin to kill one kind of bird but fine to eat another, however there must be something so wrong with a person to want to destroy such...
You are clever at making the
Posted on Mon, 30 Aug 2021
You are clever at making the reader feel your story is true! not the ones about the pm obv. :0)
should it be storey? "Story after wooden story took the construction to new heights. "
Read full commentPosted in Chinese Whispers (edited and updated, 2021)
"the coach now sways to
Posted on Mon, 30 Aug 2021
"the coach now sways to
"the sweep of an October wind" so sinuous !
Read full commentPosted in Riding The Rails
"She smiles (thinly) spins
Posted on Sun, 29 Aug 2021
"She smiles (thinly) spins and twirls," seems sad? Is it because she is trapped doing the same dance over and over, like a doorkeeper into magic, so though she seems fragile is powerful. But longs to have wings be in the place she guards?
Read full commentPosted in Ballerina Toy Box
If so much in a conciousness
Posted on Sun, 29 Aug 2021
If so much in a conciousness is inherent instinct, there must be connection with those sharing that instinct in the present, I like how you say "a surge of the energy of one" and maybe too with those who passed the instinct down. In such brief...
Read full commentPosted in In The Beginning (for Monarch butterflies)
This is gorgeous Jenny, I'm
Posted on Sat, 28 Aug 2021
This is gorgeous Jenny, I'm also not sure I understand properly what it's about but find it very comforting and I am sure that it holds great truth
I liked particularly the pieces Rhiannon highlighted, also
"everything that came...
Read full commentPosted in Curious Ambiance
How you have broken up
Posted on Fri, 27 Aug 2021
How you have broken up sentences makes words seem frightening, like falling through ice and the bits are all sharp, where once skated effortlessly. Even the rhythm jars in your poem, adds to the fear. I am so sorry about your father, it is aweful...
Read full commentPosted in Aphasia
Ah, did wonder about that,
Posted on Wed, 25 Aug 2021
Ah, did wonder about that, they are a great advert for a Creator though, aren't they? Would be easy to think of how amazing a Creator must be, when thinking of those colours :0) The thing is, idols are man made, second hand gods, and birds aren't...
Read full commentPosted in It Is A Sin To Kill A Quetzal
I love the long, flowing
Posted on Wed, 25 Aug 2021
I love the long, flowing sounds of " canal’s slow-undulating" and "miniature, muscular" which contrast brilliantly with "hot-clay banks"
and "Golden eyed, barred mouth, striated scaled," the list uncoils like a snake's shape in water, and...
Read full commentPosted in Swimming Snake
they are so BEAUTIFUL! I had
Posted on Wed, 25 Aug 2021
they are so BEAUTIFUL! I had never heard of them, those COLOURS! It seems specisist to me, that it might be a sin to kill one kind of bird but fine to eat another, however there must be something so wrong with a person to want to destroy such...
Read full commentPosted in It Is A Sin To Kill A Quetzal
satisfying happy ending :0)
Posted on Wed, 25 Aug 2021
satisfying happy ending :0) It would be lovely to have second chances
Read full commentPosted in Wind Chimes on the Boardwalk
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