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It isn't easy to capture the

Posted on Mon, 01 Sep 2014

It isn't easy to capture the 'projection' mentality of a perpertrater of DV minimising his actions to his victim but you've got that hateful little voice down really well. I don't like this narrator because I recognise lots of infuriating men's...

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Posted in SMACK - (edited)

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Love this Parson, its

Posted on Sun, 24 Aug 2014

Love this Parson, its strength is in your reader not knowing and that ambivalence lends such possibility. That it is sea bound gave me a shiver, too many unknowns out there. The statemented style brings impact and  your visuals are sharp. It...

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Posted in Event

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 ‘That retro-folk-doggerel

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

 ‘That retro-folk-doggerel you recite to people—well, it’s like being fucked up the arse by a nose trumpet,’ is my favourite line.

Adore the symbolic wing trapped in a net, the brilliance dazzling behind concrete walls, the Panopticon of...

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Posted in The Avondale Ward

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What a heart burner of a

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

What a heart burner of a piece. It's full of love and yet just out of reach. 

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Posted in The day before December 30th

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The box kite's crucial to me

Posted on Mon, 18 Aug 2014

The box kite's crucial to me in this because it isn't just a box kite. It's ether and touch, a link between child and parent, a sky offering and a floating away. This poem has had a hefty impact on me. That's as much as I can say. It has...

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Posted in Present Imperfect

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It is another man's treasure.

Posted on Fri, 15 Aug 2014

It is another man's treasure. Often think the same of kid's strange collections. This is stunning, the care in the words makes him as precious as his newsprint.

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Posted in Another Man's Treasure

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This is gorgeously tragic.

Posted on Mon, 11 Aug 2014

This is gorgeously tragic. The sea shells don't help her, do they, for all they've heard.  Adore it's ambiguity, how you can tell your own story from it. 'room full of fresh air' is my favourite line, the emptiness swallows you. 

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Posted in Secrets and Seashells

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The emotional drainage is

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

The emotional drainage is well conveyed Phillip, your clipped sentences work well to unbutton this interaction down to bare bones. The only distraction for me is the capitalisation on every line. Know it's a style preference but I often get...

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Posted in Dirty Lucre

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It's inventive and thoughtful

Posted on Tue, 19 Aug 2014

She's inventive and colourful with a tang of Cockney fun. Just like an autumn tart should be.

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Posted in Apples, Pears and Treacle Tart (I.P)

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Really enjoyed this, Phillip.

Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014

Really enjoyed this, Phillip. There's a slow burn pace to your narrative and lots of internal considerations which gives depth to your piece.

Perhaps you could move your opening line lower down into the prose? The metaphorical...

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