I have 0 stories published in
0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read times317 of my 3,299 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 322 votes
317 of my comments have received 322 Great Feedback votes
1 Vote
Really liked the description
Posted on Wed, 12 Mar 2014
Really liked the description in this, could see it all, very well-drawn, Neil. Wasn't sure about soporific in the opening line - mainly because I had to google it. Have changed my mind now - it fits well. A good chapter.
Really liked this MrChapper Engaging from the opening. The gift itself is incredibly sad and your references to time slipping away, then the elderly parent's house upkeep gives a strong message. It's a universal story because we all face it or...
Hello, more to chew on here. Gruesome stuff. Grrrh, I think I'd be tempted to start at 'I must've been studying her for weeks' because it starts straight at the point of intrigue. Keep going!
The way your character zones in on minutaie in the shower is good, lots of fine detail, her inner monologue draws you in. Only bit I wasn't sure about was the pouffe string, it trivialises the seriousness of the mood somewhat. The cutting end is...
Really liked the description
Posted on Wed, 12 Mar 2014
Really liked the description in this, could see it all, very well-drawn, Neil. Wasn't sure about soporific in the opening line - mainly because I had to google it. Have changed my mind now - it fits well. A good chapter.
Read full commentPosted in Surface Tension - Chapter 20
This is vivid and
Posted on Sat, 22 Feb 2014
This is vivid and transporting with its hint of darkness. Really enjoyed.
Read full commentPosted in That Field
Loved this. A healthy dose of
Posted on Thu, 20 Feb 2014
Loved this. A healthy dose of sense-making nonsense with a splash of slapstick.
Read full commentPosted in Sar-chasm
Really liked this MrChapper
Posted on Mon, 17 Feb 2014
Really liked this MrChapper Engaging from the opening. The gift itself is incredibly sad and your references to time slipping away, then the elderly parent's house upkeep gives a strong message. It's a universal story because we all face it or...
Read full commentPosted in The Waiting Room
Wi-fi has a walking stick
Posted on Sat, 15 Feb 2014
Wi-fi has a walking stick -Brilliant. Thoroughly enjoyed this.Unique perspective, as ever.
Read full commentPosted in I love this storm
This feels so tender and real
Posted on Thu, 13 Feb 2014
This feels so tender and real, the characters are vividly drawn with such care. Looking forward to more.
Read full commentPosted in Grandad's Party - Chapter 1 of 3
Hello, more to chew on here.
Posted on Wed, 05 Feb 2014
Hello, more to chew on here. Gruesome stuff. Grrrh, I think I'd be tempted to start at 'I must've been studying her for weeks' because it starts straight at the point of intrigue. Keep going!
Read full commentPosted in Souvenir (part 2 of ?) [considerably longer than the last part..]
Yes, some lovely descriptions
Posted on Sat, 01 Feb 2014
Yes, some lovely descriptions in this.Would love to read more.There's a deep consideration of language which makes the stillness intense.
Read full commentPosted in Memoirs Of Desolation
The way your character zones
Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2014
The way your character zones in on minutaie in the shower is good, lots of fine detail, her inner monologue draws you in. Only bit I wasn't sure about was the pouffe string, it trivialises the seriousness of the mood somewhat. The cutting end is...
Read full commentPosted in Seven-Eighths
What a fizzy, light poem with
Posted on Tue, 21 Jan 2014
What a fizzy, light poem with some deceptive teasing.
Read full commentPosted in Letter to a friend
Pages