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Some excellent imagery in this. It accurately describes a lot of the conflict of moving on, or wanting to.

Thank you, Alex! I'm glad you got a sense of conflict; what I definitely aimed to portray.

Magic xxx

very visual imagery. Well done.

Thanks, celticman! Glad you like this one ;)

Magic xxx

absolutely better than good. very cleverly written- yes there is definetly a conflict that you can sense by your imagery. well deserved cherries

Thank you, Highhat! Glad you enyoyed :)

Magic xxx

the idea of base camps and flags is brilliant Magic, and you've done this piece with a light touch too, which makes it more serious, if you see what I mean

Cheers, insert :) Glad that bit of imagery appealed to you too - the poem started with those images, oh and I do see what you mean ;)

Magic xxx

I really enjoyed this Magic! The imagery is astounding in my opinion, a massive well done on the cherry from me- richly deserved as always :) I really liked the sincerity, I think we can all relate to feeling like this at times and you articulate the feeling so well. Beautiful- stunning in fact. Defiantly one of my favourites of yours.

Beeme xx

Thank you, Beeme! Glad you took so much from this one :) I can't help but hear 'Mr Brightside' by The Killers in my head whenever I re-read it lol

Magic xxx

Again, I got to the party late. My apologies;-)

As I said before, this one indeed bears the hallmark of your, as ever, original and more than effective imagery, Magic.

More than well done;-)

Tina xxx

Thank you, Tina! So glad you like this one ;) Thanks for taking a look at it beforehand too!

Magic xxx

eloquent. seductive. conflicted.
well done.
:)

Thank you, JoseHdz! So happy you got just what I wanted from this one ;)

Magic xxx

Ooh Magic, ii feel your dilemma! I like the conquering land idea, makes me think of old british knights & kings. Is that song 'an ii jus cant look its killing me! an taking control.. jealosy! ii never-uher' always on my radio station that one, I really admire
, how you manage to make it not 'PG'
even though its my favourite tea! ;)
I made a rhyme of another comment :D
cant help myself making poems you see
anyway,
especially like 'scorching out your signature,' and 'my heart opens her bleary eyes
' to hiding away again,' ii know it too. K xxx

It is indeed that song, Kahdai! I was listening to it after writing this and these lyrics really struck a chord with me:

'Now I'm falling asleep
And she's calling a cab
While he's having a smoke
And she's taking a drag
Now they're going to bed
And my stomach is sick
And it's all in my head
But she's touching his chest
Now, he takes off her dress
Now, let me go...'

Magic xxx

yes ok smoke & smoking is rather poetic... ;) xxx

Subtle and strong - magnificent balance as always magic; well done.
;)

Thank you darkenwolf! Glad I haven't disappointed ;)

Magic xxx

Very good. Actually it reminded me more of John Donne, who I don't suppose ever shared a smoke with his ladyfriend, but I guess these things echo down through time. Rob

Thank you, Rob! I haven't read a lot of Donne, but will be doing as part of my first year at Durham - so I'll let you know when I see what you mean ;)

Magic xxx

I don't know his work that well either, although what I've read of his love poetry is amazingly intense. I think it was the 'muse impersonator' and the personification of your heart - it felt a little reminiscent of that era, which was interesting for a poem about the consequences of sharing a cigarette ...

i've been away for far too long and missed some excellent mistaken magic poetry. you're awesome!!!

jason

I'll definitely check out his love poetry then, Rob ;)

Jason! It's AWESOME to hear from you again :) :) I hope you're still as awesome as ever?

Magic xxx

Lovely piece Magic x Very enjoyable :)x

Thank you, Firebird! Glad you enjoyed ;)

Magic xxx

Original, atmospheric and just brilliant as a whole piece. I loved it. Well done.

Nathan.

Thank you, Nathan! :) It's great to see you around on here again!

Magic xxx

Fantastic, a very fine piece

xx :--)