Raincoat with Four Sleeves

Cherry

By jennifer

Thu, 11 Dec 2008
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Raincoat with Four Sleeves (11th Dec 2008, 10.33am)

Cuff me, bind my vituperative hands
in coils of barb and twine, you swine!
Uncurse my words, the witch twitch
unsightly, for I am angered, nightly,
striving to perfect each twisted verse!

Incense the critics, feed the comments,
pour fertilizer on my weedy scribbles,
the twigs will fruit, the quids will come;
I do my best and yet there is still one
who beats me with my own youth.

I am ignorant and yet I yearn to feed,
drink fast, swallow jagged pills of truth
and knowledge, my oesophagus bleeds
in this determined quest; I don’t know
best; my chest is high, my arse still tight.

Help me, damselled in my desperate plight,
as I choke on my rhymes, reflections of
past rejection; without pain, I am nothing.
Prod me with your stings, for you win;
my youthful smile, hippo-wide, imagining.

Certificate 12
Poem
Out of my Head (Autumn 2008)
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Bradene on
Still agonising over your writing? (: the only critic you have my love is you! You are a fine poet, I wish I had a fraction of your talent. Val x

Submitted by tinalouise on
Wonderful tirade of words that read in one breath to create a powerful piece. The rhythm of this suited me and it read like desperation? Like a need for acceptance - more by self than anything else? As if you move your own goal post every time you near it. Strange effect was that I felt I had read a far longer poem - there was so much packed well into this. Namaste, Tina Louise “The world is a dangerous place. Not because of the people who are evil; but because of the people who don't do anything about it.” Albert Einstein

Namaste,
Tina Louise

“The world is a dangerous place. Not because of the people who are evil; but because of the people who don't do anything about it.”
Albert Einstein

Submitted by jennifer on
Thank you, both! Yes, ever the perfectionist, that's me! But this is how my writing improves, it's my Jack Russell temperament, worry, worry, worry at the words! J x

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Oh, how I understand the feeling. If only I could express it as well as you have here. I agree with Tina: this is a powerful piece indeed.