Waltzing Matilda

Yes, Mr Churchill had a lot to answer for. I liked the fifth verse and the way that the rhymes become less followed. And I liked the 'coats of fire' line. That old Pogues song on the same subject takes some beating but this comes as close as any I've heard.

New Silver-spun-sand Really good historical poem, very well thought out. Cockerel crows,and boy's to men. But fourth stanza that begins:I like. The sweethearts wave and say goodbye, the children ask their elders, 'Why?' "For King and country,"they reply and as the clock chimes half-past five, they ride off in coats of fire julie xx.

Hi Tina, Really liked this. Just a teensy weensy suggestion, to keep the rhyming scheme going you could change "in a dream that turned to dust" to "in a dream that none rode off in" (ties in nicely to last line of previous verse). You create the atmosphere really well, the contrast between the partying at the start and the horror of the battle works really well. Yet more good stuff. David xx :--)

You hug away!! Thank you so much for allowing me to make a suggestion let alone taking me up on it. David xx :--)

Very effective, dance rhythm drives the narrative to its conclusion. Clever. atb lena xx

A wonderful tale, all the verses are brilliant and the rhyming seems so effortless, which is the beauty of putting in so much work, A triumph,

I remember this one, Tina! And, as always, I am very fond of the imagery in the first stanza and the whole melancholy yet beautiful feel of the poem. Well done on this one ;) Magic xxx

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new silver-spun-sand I am not good at explaining.but we have 5 re-mote controls t.v.same.This is 3rd comment on punctuation now one plural's! = where it has one and not.What means what.But Different kind one each time of correction,to Puntuation not easy at all for me.hard for me.Thankyou for excellent help.Yep! willdo.In life too.Shame after lovely Editor's t.cook Tony and Abctales and all. new version for me slight punctuation so I can watch it too.Like you good compliment.I am a "L" confusing to me.To much punctuation,each person is different way we think.If I don't grasp.something I can't. thankyou so much.Water bottle burst,every where! hence poem,"The Burst Bubble".Wet bed the lot. got to go for now. Thankyou julie xx .

I like this a lot ,Tina. You are such a talented writer x:)