Butterfly eyes (sonnet) second draft

Hi old pesky, I am doing ok, with added frustrations, of liver problems alcohol issues (why is it that drug dependency counsellors want to be known by their first name? its not as I want to be friends with them or anything like that for Christ's sake. I expect its to show some sense of vulnerability, but when the bloke (Mark) I am going to see doesn't even get my name right it makes me wonder why he, or I for that matter bother.) illness... bouts of depression and huge questions relating to tradition, dissent, and reason. Essentially in the Christian church. This has left me with huge issues relating to faith, religion how tradition is necessary, especially in the legal framework, but also how Christianity, coming from its birth from a place of dissent has never really been able to set comfortably into a tradition. (bhuddism is comfortable with tradition as are some forms of Hindu worship, But the traditions of all the middle eastern faiths seem to lack the ability to be shaped into a definable tradition so easilly and this leads to conflict and dispersal.) So this has left me thinking that either Christianity is a total lie, and therefore , the most criminal act to have occurred in 2000 years or it is the truth. (note I am not trying to preach... I am trying to understand the nature of humanity and conflict and how to stop it.) Humanity has spent its time searching for truth, when it finds truth is reasons it and then makes it into a tradition that is then passed down. but this doesn't work with Faith because faith is a personal experience and cannot be traditionalized, so faith is either insane or a part of the construction of the universe. either way having at the heart of a legal system is very dangerous as this leads to subversion and eventually destruction. I feel I am slipping into a hallucinatory form of madness... sorry I am not well... I would rather be writing stories... I have an idea that taking form I think I have already started it in a shorter story. its based upon the concept that the universe we know was divided into three at the point of creation (God divided the light form the dark and made the earth...) therefore there are three universes intertwined and competing for the same amount of space, interfering with each other and in a state of flux. There are travellers... called navigators who fly between the universes through portals, a sphere on a tripod. The dark universe is a prison and the light universe is a place of freedom. but there have been battles between the two sides for domination of this universe. enter in Charlie who has the key to the whole problem. But he doesn't know it. he is taken by a navigator and shown the state of the worlds, but he is tempted by darkness. not by light. That is because the darkness hides things but the light doesn't.Also the queen of the night is very sexy... in the end he has to make a decision and due to the death of his navigator friend, who is also sexy, but in a light way he chooses light as the price he has to make is reasoned out. he gives the key to the king of light and as he does the universes are reconstructed. What do you think? is it worth the effort? Its a sort of Harry potter meets The Hitchikers guide meets trainspotting meets the bible... if you see my point. in relating to poetry there are several forms. The sonnet was one of Shakespeare's (or Christopher Marlowe depending upon your point of view.)favourite. essentially they form 16 lines in length and are supposed to be four lines of two rhyming couplets each, following the abcd pattern. following the iambic pattern within the sentence structure... I very rarely get it right, because of my dyslexia. But I like word patterns and visual constructions, this is why I write what I do. And have found myself writing more poetry of late. (I think.) there Are other forms too. But we, my wife children and I are in the process of moving, the books are packed and I have forgotten. I promise I will get back to you at a later date. But for a deeper understanding there is the poetry archive I have a link for you to look at. There is useful information here. please get back to me next week and I will be able to help you here. otherwise then there is the link below... its very useful. http://www.poetryarchive.org/poetryarchive/glossaryIndex.do sorry for the rant I am very ill at the moment and need some grounding. Blessings a great poet here, as is Pia. as is... well the list is endless... I recommend you read some of their work. I have to go now. Take care. Andy

have a good day too. No the move is rubbish, as all moves are. My OU teacher described poetry as painting with words, so if you get the sensuality right, all good poetry has a strong sensual link to it, (eg Seamus Heany) the colour right and the tone right, your a made poet. Just not a published one. I am glad you like the idea I have to write it yet. The course is helping me as I have had to plan my first piece of writing, and that is something I never do. It has helped, so I might do some planning for the story, as with Wolfs bane which might dispense with the wolves altogether, though I much prefer wolves to vampires... which are very black and white... there is the monster-dog in us all so... that can be empathised with. enjoy messing about with poetry and send some to a loved one, or someone you want to bed... it works...it does... cheers Andy