Going away

By confusedteen

Fri, 14 Jun 2013
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5 comments
 

I’m going away for a while
But, don’t worry
I’ll return as soon as possible
You see I’m trying to find my place
I know it’s not here
Because I don’t feel safe
So goodbye for now
A bid you adieu
Farewell
But don’t forget
Don’t beat yourself up
Don’t forget
To take care of yourself
Don’t forget
I’m always here for you
And don’t forget
I will always love you

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Comments

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Sweet, sad and heartfelt. I like this. Rich

 

Submitted by adbates on
The beginning is oddly similar to Misguided Ghosts by Paramore. It's like you incorporated different parts of the song to the first half. Then, switched it up. Maybe just a coincidence?

 

Submitted by confusedteen on
Yeah I actually think I did. But it was a while back when I wrote this. I like to do that with some of poetry, guess it was what I was really feeling at the time. Is that a bad thing?

Submitted by adbates on
Of course not! Just be careful not to plagiarize. Inspiration comes everywhere never a bad thing to use it.

 

Submitted by confusedteen on
Yeah that's what I was scared of, thanks for telling me though. Like I said I wrote it a while back, so I don't exactly remember.

Submitted by adbates on
I was put off with the word "because." As it reads, it's saying I belong her because it makes me feel unsafe. But that contradicts the lines before it. I may be misinterpreting it; if so, I'd like to have a deeper understanding of what's going on here.

 

Submitted by confusedteen on
Oops, I meant to write "I know it's not here, because I don't feel safe." Thanks for pointing it out! Like I said I'm not a very experienced writer. I'll go back and edit it now.