please dont get dressed

Cherry

By mikilowe

Sun, 05 Jan 2014
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3 comments
 

 

 

its all gone, now-

 

my gilded glasses broke

the spray painted layer of bad gold

chipped,

 

and i remember when you'd say,

to me;

please don't, please don't get dressed

already

and i'd think , for you,

for you i'd burn all my clothes,

i'd make a little fire of my dresses 

on the platform of your gilded mind.

 

but it's all gone, now,

and i remember how you'd say

to me,

at 3am when i smoked and drank water

and ashed in the glass and got up, 

'please, don't get dressed yet,

already.'

Certificate 15
Poem

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

'I'd think, for you I'd burn all my clothes,' - a great expression of remembered love. Opening with the fact that it's 'gone now -' the gilded glasses having broken, etc. adds so much to the feeling of disappointment which comes accross in the main body of the piece. The last little scene is so well portrayed and telling. I like this poem very much for its unassuming style. It's simply put, but there's more to it every time you look.

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

Excellent imagery and metaphor worked into this well crafted poem.  Nice one.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

This is beautiful. It seems so honest and yet when you look closely, it changes into something else and the meaning shifts. Poetic trickery at its best.