DRIP
By tinacatling
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Drip
Salt and water first within
then falling wet upon my skin
Acid ache, deeper drills
I wish I taken the bloody pills
I recognise these sides, slipplery and black
I recognize these signs … looking back
One day bright the next day grey
It’s almost impossible to say
when
no one knows what’s going on
Sitting in this happy throng
Paranoia shouts…”watch your back”
This really isn’t that much craic
You have everything - that includes the hole
You have nothing really except your sole
You want to go and also stay
Emotions caustic make you sway..
Why the fuck?
were you born this way?
The sting is deep inside my core
Why should I be wanting more?
Aching for a home to stay
Is hurting more than I should say
Left alone too long this weak
Left too much time for me to seek
Answers
Salt and water first within
then falling Wet upon my skin
Drip
Just Grin
Anyting else would be a
Sin
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Enjoyed, I feel you are over
Enjoyed, I feel you are over reaching for the sake of the rhymes through in two places.
maisie Guess what? I'm still alive!
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I love this! Welcome to
I love this! Welcome to ABCtales Tina. Can't wait to read more..
Now, I've read it a few times and with each read I have liked it more. There is a lot going on here. A fragmented mind at work in terms of the poetic narrative perhaps. Just needs tightening and a little sorting out. Even so it's very good. Hope you're ok with that (obviously subjective) opinion.
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Good advice from scratch. I
Good advice from scratch. I really liked your poem, too.
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