Let Down Your Guard

Cherry

By The Pretender

Tue, 10 Jun 2014
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5 comments
 

Guarded letters guarding hearts,

Saving face in wordy vaults. 

Hiding life in secret parts

Braving not to bear our faults

 

Guards his words like playing cards,

Close to chest as they could be

Two aces or a draw that's hard,

They're just for him to see.

 

Guarded punctuation marks

In fear they could be wrong, 

Barter with those naked scars

"How much to make you gone?"

 

Hold on!

 

Guarded letters? Fuck the fear 

I'll take a sucker punch. 

All that guarantees your snears

Is not to take the plunge. 

 

Guarded letters locked in dark,

The loss not worth the save.

Best for you to bear your heart

Just see what others say. 

Certificate PG
Poem
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by The Pretender on

So this is my first upload. Radio silence is now officially broken. Leave a comment of any nature and I'll be happy. Thank you 

Submitted by scratch on

Well I love this!  Your first contribution and its so well concieved.  I love the step change that you bring in the fifth stanza.  Hey and a cherry too - someone else must like it too!

 

Submitted by The Pretender on

Thanks for your kind feedback. I was really chuffed to see the cherry. As I live on an island WiFi is often an issue. My appearances will therefore be slighlty sporadic and I'll miss comments for a day or two but very glad to hear from you :) 

Submitted by Luke Neima on

Hi Pretender,

This is a strong piece and a bold response to the inspiration point. Love the volta (Hold on!) and the rounded picture this makes. A warm welcome to ABC!

Submitted by The Pretender on

Thanks very much Luke for your comments and teaching me the word 'volta'  there;) I look forward to posting more pieces and getting to know the site and it's members. A couple of kind comments and a cheeky wee cherry has thoroughly lifted my pre-work mood