Big

Gold cherry

By Bee

Sun, 03 May 2015
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19 comments
 

Told my boy today -

my big bear 

of a man; a gorilla,



balding under the sun -

first child, six foot tall,

black wire curling



from his shirt, instead of fine 

remembered gold; my boy

today. Big men cry.

Certificate 12
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by Mark Say on

I liked this for its brief and highly effective description of the man, and the contrast of the image the last line plants in the mind. Nice one Bee.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you Mark. Glad the contrast worked.

Bee

Submitted by tibi popovici on

like the gorilla association and yes, any boy must got a piece of a big man.

T.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Tibi.

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

The buggy photo , the grown up boy crying with his balding head, the word economy that leaves you to imagine. Made me tearful. A poignant piece.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Vera. That means so much.

Bee

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

It's so sad to see a big strong man cry yet of course they have emotions like the rest, sometimes more. This is a very poignant poem. 

 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

Hi AE. 

Yes, emotions, we all have them. Thank you for reading, and for your thoughtful comments. 

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

HI Bee

Lovely, moving, heart-breaking.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Editor, for reading, and for the cherries.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Good to have that relationship with a grown-up son. And for a son to be strong enough to be willing to cry and show it. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

That's true. Thank you, Rhiannon.

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Bee, this is heart wrenching. We can only guess at what he was told and why he cried.

So much in so few words excellent work

Ed

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, Ed. Really, very much appreciated.

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

This is our Facebook and Twitter pick of the day!

Get a fantastic reading recommendation every day.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks scratch, pick of the day is lovely!

x

Bee

Submitted by RJF on

Goose bumps again, you get me every time Bee. Beautiful. R x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, R. Keep hoping to read something from you.

x

Bee