‘Coming Home’

By Art of the Diver

Sat, 27 Jun 2015
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‘Coming Home’

 

Ah stream, you’ve changed and yet remained

determined to meet your sea, prismed ripples thrown

Constant chatter to each stone you hurry along

past banks and falls shaped to fit your play

gliding ever in touch with whatever you carry away

past basking trout, a mayfly's dare, is to roam

in life’s countdown, the odds against have grown

But stream, you know - You’ll always be coming home

 

                                        *~ Pearldiver ~

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Comments

Submitted by EB on

Very visual and carefully worded without waste. Did you mean 'your mayfly's dare, (is) to roam.' or 'your mayflies dare to roam' ? Wasn't sure. Excellent though.

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Elliot

Wow thank you for very tactfully pointing that out - a late night oversight. You are quite right - it is the former option and it's flow that best suits the overall current of the poem. Really appreciate the wisdom in your perspective. Cheers for taking the time to share it

Rob

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Enjoyed the chatter feel of following the stream along, with the ripples and the touching and on-flow. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Rhiannonw

Thank you for saying that... so often that conversation is heard before the stream is sighted. That aspect of any stream I find rather appealing and often worth coming home to on those days when I'm needing to feel motivated. Cheers for taking the time

Rob

Submitted by love_writing on

Beautifully reassuring.

love_writing

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi LW,

Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. It's about reconnecting with the familiarity of home, as does every stream/river in its quest to come home naturally to the sea.  Cheers, take care

Rob

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

A lovely image, the stream hurrying home, a sense of constant movement and hope.

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Thank you Philip

Yes and also perhaps too subtly, the parallel of reconnecting as a person coming home to their roots, and thus to those natural things (streams etc,) that they find 'at home' doing the same, in their own sense of being. Much appreciate your visit and kind words... take care

Rob

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Wonderful internal rhyming here, Rob...change/remained, prism/ripples, for example. In all an enigmatic piece, as its subject.

Very much enjoyed, and by reading it just now you have taken me away from the mundane (polishing, dusting, etc.) and transported me to somewhere I would much rather be.  Thank yousmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Thank you so much for your supportive encouragement there Tina. I guess if a poem can take one away from anything mundane and change one's outlook positively, then it is worthy of carrying the heart of the one who created it. But you know that Tina - You are one of the masters of that creative influence! Very pleased that you enjoyed this piece. Cheers for taking the time and take care.

Rob

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rob,

being a water sign I was drawn to this poem.

I love the thought you've given to the musing of the stream, as it meanders along, taking in all it encounters along the way.

Very much enjoyed reading.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Hi Jenny

I should have known from the swimmingly flow of your words fellow water sign!! The call of the sea affects me every day Jenny, I've never known whether it's because I was brought up on a small island or because I've got a double shot of water in my veins. A Scorp in Western terms and a Water Dragon in Eastern terms of astrology. Perhaps it's the combination of the three, but never a day goes by without having either the ocean, lake or river close by. To me it's as important as air!

Glad you enjoyed this piece about reconnecting with that element. Thanks for reading my splash Jenny. You take care up there...

Rob