Feeling in the pit of my stomach
By Mermaid in a Gown
Wed, 29 Jul 2015
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It started with the other day
When the rain dripped down and smeared our view.
My heart skipped a beat knowing that the baseball fields would be too wet to play,
and so you were forced to be inside and stay-
with me.
But all you've done is sleep through the rain,
and barley touch me.
unlike the water streaming down the window pane,
snug together in the balance of weather-
you've kept your distance like the sun hidden from our faces.
without your warmth, my heart turns cold too.
I wonder what your thinking and how your feelng,
but your basking in the rain- while I'm trying to turn us back to the sun.
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Some really skilful use of
Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on
Some really skilful use of contrasts. The long lines really give it an atmosphere of melancholy.
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