waiting

By MarciaMarcia

Thu, 10 Dec 2015
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9 comments
 

Waiting

 

we left

together

September's

wind

shivered

nestled

within

coats

breathing

air muffled

warmth

beneath

scarved

throats

 

booted

heels

paced

in sync

timely

stepped

towards

day's

unknown

 

our words

smiles 

laughter

melodious

memory

mixed

present

footed

and

presence

dreamed

 

I carried

shouldered

satchel

full

light weighted

twisted

rounds

nestled

threads

layered

bound

in woolen

multicolor

blessings

woman

woven

hand's

spun

a thousand years

of tribal cover

into one

my first

 

You

wore

beneath

weathered

cloak

a reference book

a stethoscope

whitest

heavy

laden

cloth

in healer's

hearted

troth,

yet

carried

there

in innocence

a calling

greater

made

aware

within

your womb's

nestled

cover

blessed

by tribal

rainbowed hands

in span

a thousand years

portrayed,

a son

your first .. ... .. ... .. ... .. ... ..we walked on.. ... ..                                                    

                                                                                    MarciaMarcia     December 2015

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by MarciaMarcia on

Thank you Sim. I do read out loud and always edit. 

Yes "nestle X  three" is meant to be. 

Thank you for your clarity. 

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Submitted by Sim on

Another glorious poem, MarciaMarcia! But read out loud and edit before posting. You have used "nestled" three times.

Sim

Submitted by Sim on

I take that back!. On re-reading I get the triple use of "nestled". There is a strong sense of protection: of bodies protected by winter wear, of mother protecting daughter with her blessings, of daughter protecting the sick and protecting deep within her body the promise of her unborn son. But more than that the two women seem to be cocooned wthin a continuum of reciprocal female love stretching back through history as they prepare for what is to come.

Sim

Submitted by MarciaMarcia on

Thank you Sim for the reread  

"you've definitely got it now". 

I've been told, that how I write, needs several reads, before the meanings reach clarity within the reader. Sometimes the message is different for each person. I find involving the viewer within the viewing process

within the arts, creates a journey well spent for both the artist and the seeker of tales. 

Submitted by MarciaMarcia on

 

Submitted by MarciaMarcia on

HELP !!! 

Can I resubmit "waiting" into this week's inspiration point ?

if I can. I don't know how. 

Can someone tell me? Thank You

          MarciaMarcia

Submitted by aech on

I realize I'm too late with this, but in the top right corner on the page of your poem there's an "edit" link and that takes you to a page where you can scroll down near the bottom and add the ip genre. :) 

Beautiful poem. I adore this style, where each word is intentional and receives its own importance, instead of being just a part of a group.