One Day in October

By Penny4athought

Sun, 08 Oct 2017
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7 comments
 

Come hither shaped branches

Sway on tall barren trees

Outlined in ghost light

On all Hallows Eve

 

Brave little demons,

Dragons and ghosts

Minions and kings,

Ninjas and toads

 

With bright orange bags 

Clutched in the hands

Laughing and spooking

All over the lands

 

A knock, a chant

of “Trick or Treat”

Calling for candy

And sweet things to eat

 

Found at each door

Scary décor

Giggles and chills   

Jack-o-lanterns and more

 

One day in October

One full mooned night

One witches brew

Of Halloween Delight

 

 

Certificate 12
Poem
Fantasy

Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

I love all the stuff around Halloween, always made a big thing of it with my kids when they were young.  

I enjoyed this very much, starts off mysterious and then we get to the fun part.  I didn't think the first verse worked quite as well as the rest, the rhythm and rhyme weren't quite as good.  You have some lovely images - the 'come hither branches' just exactly evoke those spooky bare trees.  Great stuff! 

 

Submitted by Penny4athought on

HI airyfairy, 

Your perception is impeccable, I was actually playing with two different themes of Halloween and the leading verse would work better with the other - I have gone back and deleted that verse and I hope it blends better for the imagery of the poem. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and the helpful advice. smiley

Penny4athought

Submitted by Penny4athought on

 my comment posted twice- not sure why? smiley

Penny4athought

Submitted by airyfairy on

It's the posting-twice gremlins, in practice for Halloween!

I personally feel it reads better now - more like a whole, complete piece.  I hope you'll post the other piece as well - look forward to reading that!

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Yes, it must be those pesky Halloween Gremlins. -

Thank you again airyfairy for your lovely comments and I will work on that second theme and post it.smiley 

Penny4athought

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

My favorite time of the year, Penny. You captured it well here. We live on Main street in our town. So we attract many of the little costumed ones. Enjoyed this.

Rich

 

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Thank you Rich- I was trying to capture the essence of Halloween and the spooky,happy night of childhood fun. I'm so glad you liked it.  smiley

Penny4athought