the mad lady and me by nashelle

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Tue, 2006-07-11 17:40

http://www.abctales.com/story/nashelle/the-mad-lady-and-me

i enjoyed the fresh voice in this, and it depicts life from a patients perspective realistically. It is posted as autobiographical and that makes me reticent to offer any crit, but i look forward to more of this.

Juliet

Tue, 2006-07-11 23:02

brighteyes

To be honest, I'd rather not know if it;s autobiographical or not, because I enjoyed the piece and its attention to detail a lot, reading it as fiction. Lots of black humour in there. My only qualm was about the age or mental age of the speaker. It seemed they sounded younger in tone than they actually were, and while I realise the speaker is a patient in a psychiatric institution, I still feel they would have more of an adult syntax/manner of speaking.

"I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."

Wed, 2006-07-12 12:32

tcook

I think that this story has a real 'voice'. It comes over as intensely real and vivid. The images that it conjures - with no real description - are right in front of you. It's a snapshot - and nothing wrong with that - but I wonder (a) how realistic it is and (b) if it could be developed to really go somewhere.

Wed, 2006-07-12 15:37

Nashelle

Thanks for your comments. Brighteyes I always have trouble putting accross age. Tcook - go back to the 1970's and it's realistic!

Wed, 2006-07-12 22:42

neilmc

"but Emily doesnâ€™t like stories with men in them â€“unless itâ€™s Father Christmas or God." Cracking line. I can believe these people all right, my wife's done psychy nursing.

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