Silver Spun Sand

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Wed, 2006-05-31 21:47

pizzas.ready

Silver Spun Sand

SSS, my friend and I were discussing this piece of yours...

http://www.abctales.com/story/silver-spun-sand/do-you-remember-a-night-s...

I am instantly (and much too forcefully) reminded of Hilaire Belloc's classic 'Tarentela', but my friend says it reminds her much more of Abba's 'Fernando'.

What say you?

To ease the riddle, here is Belloc;

http://www.thecapras.org/mcapra/miranda/tarantela.html

and Abba;

http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/abba/fernando.html

Thu, 2006-06-01 00:18

Silver Spun Sand

And you are instantly and none too forcefully (pizza's ready) dead right! Belloc's 'Tarantella', "Do you remember an Inn, Miranda?" fascinated and captivated me as a 10 year old and I feel humbled to have emulated just a spark of that marvellous poem. Equally, thinking about it, I guess Bjorn and Bennie (Abba) could equally have been influenced by Belloc because I can definately see the link. Thank you so much for your inspired comments. Guess that's what this poetry lark is all about. SSS

Thu, 2006-06-01 08:39

pizzas.ready

I guessed as much. I wouldn't say the entire poem is reminiscent of Belloc, just the direct patterning in the first line (or two, depending on which version of tarantella one reads.) Hilaire's is just so clever. Rhythmical. Looks like it took months to write, and wasn't just banged out in minutes. I like Hilaire Belloc's poem very much.

Thu, 2006-06-01 08:55

Juliet OC

these poetic refs tend to pass me by so thanks for pointing it out and providng a link pizzas.ready. As for your poem SSS, i like the first stanza, but the second i find a little cliched, the third works well and maybe it woks well because of the cliche? Now i've gone in circles. If anything i think it needs to be longer, to convey all the promises she made, which would then build up to the end. just my thoughts. I know you work really hard at your poetry and like Belloc don't just bang them out in minutes. Juliet

Juliet

Thu, 2006-06-01 11:33

Silver Spun Sand

Quite agree, pizzas. ready. Hilaire is fantastic - born on the same day as me in fact, so they have to be!(the day not the year I would hasten to add!!!) My favourite lines:- ' Snapping of the clapper Out and in And the Tin, Tong, Tang of the Guitar.' Thanks to Juliet for your interest too and I'm glad that through my humble little ditty you are now familiar with this wonderful poem. I agree with you that maybe it could be slightly longer (maybe I'll work on it) but the second stanza is as you say written to contrast with the last. But I guess it's all a matter of perspectives and I find it extremely useful and enlightening to hear differing points of view. By listening to them we all grow a little taller. Ty SSS

Thu, 2006-06-01 15:36

Silver Spun Sand

I can hear them all right BBF - just like you. The difference is, I dance to the beat of a different drummer.

Thu, 2006-06-01 16:19

Silver Spun Sand

Come on BBF - didn't say I could hear war drums - did I? Answering your concern, yes, thankyou. I'm happy on the outside as well - more so than inside today... just a touch of indigestion I think. 'Talking' to you, always makes me happy anyway. Ty SSS

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