I've always said I have your hands
By shoe
Tue, 23 Feb 2010
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You asked me to drive you,
One out- of -the- blue afternoon.
We wandered among the weeds
and grass grown too long,
past the fresh brown earth
and fading hot house flowers.
We had to count the rows
to find the place.
You tore at the couch grass with your bare hands,
Only your face seemed to have protection.
And I saw myself, on my knees,
Somewhere in the future,
Tearing at the past
where the grass has grown,
too long.
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Such a poignant picture you
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Such a poignant picture you paint here, Shirley. The imagery of the grass, etc. works extremely well.
The third stanza is of course, the telling one... only you don't tell, you show, which is so much more effective:-
"We had to count the rows
to find the place..."
Our local church and its tiny cemetry so very reminiscent of the essence of this poem.
Tina
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I like this a lot. It speaks
Permalink Submitted by Kropotkin38 on
I like this a lot. It speaks I think, to anyone who has visited a graveside, and perhaps, like me, wondered why it seems so necessary to pull the weeds away and read again the inscription.
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To pinch Tina's word -
To pinch Tina's word - poignant. Particularly liked the last verse.
David xx
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I also particularly like the
I also particularly like the last verse, but it all works so well to paint a vivid and sad story which many can relate. I am always so happy when I see wild flowers growing along some graves, which would otherwise be just grass, long grass as Kropotkin38 said, I also feel needs to be pulled away to read the inscriptions.
Beeme xx
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Very beautiful and nicely
Very beautiful and nicely balanced, making each word count. The 'tearing at the past' image is particularly moving.
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& wipe the moss off the
& wipe the moss off the angel, stirring up a happy memoriy, thank-you shoe. Kahdai xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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