I Wish For You This Christmas
By alfie1997
Wed, 23 Nov 2011
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I wish I was with you this christmas,
I wish you were my present for christmas.
I wish santa would bring you to me,
I wish,
I wish,
I wish I would find you under the tree.
I wish that this christmas was with you,
I wish you were mine and this is true.
I wish you will arrive christmas eve,
I wish,
I wish,
I wish ill find you under the tree
I wish that christmas would hurry up,
I wish so ill keep my hopes up.
I wish you will be mine this christmas,
I wish,
I wish,
I wish you are with me this xmas.
I wish that you will be here this christmas,
I wish to be with you this christmas.
I wish for you this christmas,
I wish,
I wish,
I wish but wishes don't always come true.
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Hi again, alfie. Just read
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Hi again, alfie. Just read through your pieces (this one is my favourite, by the way) and it's obvious you have a great love of poetry and use it as a way to express yourself - which is great. There are some very talented writers on here who will give you loads of support and ideas, you've definitely come to the right place :)
What I suggest is that you get reading as much of other people's work as your free time allows and try and leave comments on their work if you can - a simple 'I liked this' if you enjoyed what you read will not only boost the writer in question's confidence to keep writing, but will also draw them back to your own pieces, and that way you'll get both the reads you want and some invaluable feedback. They'll see your name and think 'oh, who's this alfie1997 fella?' and check you out, and hopefully return the kindness. Unless your name appears in the 'Who's online' section on the right of the page 24/7 or you're 'cherried' for everything, it's easy to get lost amongst all the writers on here and not have your work read as much as you'd like. So get browsing, get reading and commenting and most importantly keep writing and posting here on ABC - we're a strange but loveable bunch and if you put in the time and effort to comment on others' work, you'll love it here :)
Welcome to the best writing site on the web - hope you enjoy it,
Rachel :)
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new alfie1997 Alan, I like
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new alfie1997
Alan,
I like this very much,
hope wishes come true!
I agree with penandpaperdreams
Rachael in all she says to.
Avery warm welcome to you on AbcTales.
I loved the film called 'Alfie'
what's it all about Alfie and song.
Keep writing.
cavalcaderl julie
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Yes, nice one, Alfie. Good
Yes, nice one, Alfie. Good advice in the comments on your work, welcome to ABC. I enjoyed your piece. Hope you get what you want for Christmas.
sue
TVR
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