There Is

By Richard L. Provencher

Sat, 06 Mar 2021
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3 comments
 

a yawn in his

voice as he sprints

down 13 steps

 

and soon the

scent of bacon

and eggs saturate

his space.

 

Sounds from

three children above

as they step

onto cold acrylic

flooring

 

and dad’s sing-song

“bacon ’n eggs

lures them

to the lower floor

 

where they learn

a new morning song
& before long

“bacon ‘n eggs”

fills the room.

 

 

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Certificate U
Poem
Words that Matter
Children's

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Submitted by Slater on

I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. It had a strong narrative drive and while I'm personally not a fan of all lowercase poems, I felt that you're decision to largely omit capitalization actually made the poem feel more casual almost comfortable in a sense (which is a good thing!). Just as an aside, is Sounds supposed to be capitalized. It would make sense for it to be because it is the start of a new sentence, but at the same time you didn't capitalize "a yawn in his." Please respond I need to know, it's burning me up.