Starting over

Cherry

By Deliberately Evolving

Fri, 14 Aug 2015
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Starting over

Looking into the unknown - 
a dark pool at night,
lost and far from home,
unable to see even 
your own reflexion, 
you fear the deep 
and what might lie beneath 
to stir if disturbed.
 
Or is the greater anxiety,
that in those waters,
nothing waits?
 
 
 
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Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks for the cherries Admin. I appreciate the appreciation. I'm always surprised when I get cherries.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

Hi AE.

I think you have edited this a couple of times and think it works really well now. There's uncertaity about change, and the question of whether there would be anything on the other side. 

Bee

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Yes I made a few changes, I wasn't quite happy with the first draft.  Thanks for reading and commenting.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

If 'nothing' waits, at least that is something...

nice poem...

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Possibly - it depends what you are expecting and what you are escaping from. Sometimes the fear that nothing will come from the changes you make is as fearful as the unknown. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Nicely done Holly and nice to see it join the cherries club... good message as fear is ultimately really only the fear of fear, or not! smiley Take care.out there surprise  Rob

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Rob.

Fear of fear - that sums us up in life doesn't it. Starting over is fear of the unknown too. What will life bring if you start again? Will it bring horrors or nothing at all? Which is the greater fear? 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

When you put it that way... I guess the greater fear has to be, taking the first step wink