Night Café

By UnapologeticallyMe01

Sat, 06 Jun 2020
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At night in that dusty café,

feeling as empty as the night air,  

I am reminded of pretty women who risk it all for love.

 

They say love is blind but I have yet to be blinded by love.

If a time comes that my heart beats for the one I love,

 

Will I be willing to risk it all for love?

 

Certificate U
Poem
Young Writers

Comments

Submitted by drew_gummerson on

I don't think you can have four lines all ending with 'love'. 
 

The first three lines work better by themselves. 

 

Submitted by UnapologeticallyMe01 on

Thanks for the critique! I will try and incorporate this. 

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