new year

By adld

Fri, 02 Jan 2015

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3 comments

grey this new year morning,
wait this new years morning
for the hangover to pass

Rebel-Rebel mothers sang
in a whirl for boys and girls
singing late and dancing

songs that thistles evening
lines gut-hard and echoing
into this new years morning

years have passed, are passing,
bonds have joined now scattering
or holding tight and tightening

memory lenses showing
patterns fixed or flowing
persisting or resisting

and all our laughter pattering
beach-tide bones with patterning
along this new years morning

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Poem

Comments

Lovely, the morning after and

Permalink Submitted by Philip Sidney on Sat, 2015-01-03 11:39

Lovely, the morning after and the reminder that time is passing.

1 User voted this as great feedback

I found your original and

Permalink Submitted by Hydra on Sun, 2015-01-04 10:42

I found your original and refreshing use of vocabulary - it worked paricularly welll with the poem's staccatto rythm. I also liked the little details (e.g. the Bowie reference).

Thankyou both, and from two

Permalink Submitted by adld on Sun, 2015-01-04 19:22

Thankyou both, and from two writers I much enjoy and admire and should - new years resolution I will - comment more!

adld