Ode To A One Night Stand
By alang
Sun, 22 Jan 2012
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my only regret
about
fucking
you is that
i was too drunk to
recall how
you look
naked.
i can picture you clothed
peel away the layers
but my imagination
could not possibly
do
justice
to your body
I only hope that you
don't spend as much time
thinking of me as I do of you.
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the last stanza is perfect.
Permalink Submitted by leroy mockbee on
the last stanza is perfect.
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Some great imagery in the
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Some great imagery in the second stanza and I love the lack of punctuation - my only criticism would be the capitalised 'I's in the final stanza - the poem might flow better if you stick to one way of punctuating and keep a lack of capitalization throughout!
Magic x
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Nice flow to this piece.
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Nice flow to this piece.
Rich
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I like it, worryingly deja
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
I like it, worryingly deja vu(ish)- the seeds of a misspent youth. Must look up some more of your writing. Thanks and well done...
Chris ;)
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