Triolet: from the park

By alphadog1

Wed, 28 Aug 2013
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Triolet: from the park.

We’re planning a revolution from the park:
Where all the children gather and laugh
To then climb on the frames just after dark.
We're planning a revolution from the park:
A scribble to freedom, is leaving our mark,
After lifting to life, with a very strong quaff.
We’re planning a revolution from the park,
Where, all the children gather and laugh!

©  adh 2013

 

Certificate 15
Poem
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Submitted by alphadog1 on

this was unexpected. good very pleased. 

 

 

Submitted by alphadog1 on

I posted it elsewhere, and then made changes hense the changes in type form. 

 

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

like it! it makes me want to try my hand at a triolet too.  Elsie

Submitted by alphadog1 on

go for it. You can only improve on my effort, on a tough yet beautiful form to manage.
I have to say I sort of stumbled upon it. I say sort of, as the story behind this is a bit weird. As I was working on a larger poem with a similar first line, the word "Triolet" popped into my mind. I searched for its meaning on line and found a cheese name, then a poetry definition that ran thus:   "The line scheme runs ABaAabAB (capital A's and B's = first line repitition.)  thus making grammar the key to the form." which for a dyslexic or untaught student on grammar student like myself a monster to work through. I am glad you liked it. I will edit it again after a couple of days. smiley

 

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Never tried my hand at one of these, AD.  But I like what you've done with it.

Rich