Put aside
By andrew-evans
Mon, 16 Aug 2010
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Back on this old shelf,
carved from a single
block of oak,
the dust has gathered
over the years
but still this is a place
I know,
back in the lonely corner
hidden away from the world,
next to the ornaments
and pictures,
high above the rest
of this place,
looking down on things,
there was a time when you needed me,
but now that you don't
I'll stay here till i'm needed again,
and so begins another cycle,
until the day when i'm replaced
forever.
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I like this Andrew, but I
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I like this Andrew, but I think there are a couple of typos:
line 1: do you mean shelf?
line 16: I think you mean now, instead of know (I bet you have the automatic spellcheck turned on) : )
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Hi again andrew-evans, you
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi again andrew-evans,
you are a very strong writer, very earthy. I love the
way you express yourself. Also the way you don't use
complicated words, that are very expressive I know.
But sometimes complicated. You don't complicate your
poems.
Again very sad, but very thoughtful.
Jenny.
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I like the simplistic feel
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
I like the simplistic feel to the writing, which only makes it more emotionally complex. The speaker can take on different personas, which I love and I imagined him as a child, speaking about his mother.
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Hi andrew-evans, join the
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi andrew-evans,
join the club, I don't know many complicated words
either. I am studying the dictionary at the moment I have been studying it for two weeks now, I must admit
it does help me, I get so frustrated when I can't
think of the right words to describe what I am
trying to put over.
It's that mental block thing. Oh well.
Jenny.
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