Who?...What?... Where?...

By Bradene

Sat, 13 Dec 2008
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8 comments
 

In time our bodies start to age, there is
No purpose to rant or rage, oh! really
Venting our spleens at all three Fates seems just
Irrational to get irate. So with
Snowy white or greying hair we become
Invisible; do be aware the young
Behaving like we don’t exist, will 'I fear'
Leave us feeling pissed old friend… The
End, the end, the end.

Certificate U
Poem
Life's Funny Little Foibles
Humour

Comments

Submitted by jennifer on
punctuation issues - semi-colon after invisible, comma doesn't work, and commas around 'I fear' perhaps? And perhaps give the Fates their capitalised respect? Otherwise superb and - a GOOD acrostic, well-worked! J x

 

Submitted by Bradene on
Thanks Jen, I'm so glad you are around to put me right (-; really appreciate your help. Love Val x

Submitted by jennifer on
Sorry, that sounded a bit blunt. I am not the Mistress of Subtlety, rather Mistress Blunt. Eek! J x

 

Submitted by Bradene on
I think you are just right. I'd love to be one of your students (-; Val x

Submitted by jennifer on
Haha, why is that? J x

 

Submitted by Bradene on
Because I think you would be fun and I bet they have a super nick name for you. (-; Val x

Submitted by jennifer on
Several. Their favourite joke is dropping a pen and asking me to pick it up. It's like being back at school...;) funny thing is, they think they're original! I simply must marry somebody with a funnier name than me, if I ever tie the knot! J x

 

Submitted by Bradene on
I once knew a girl called Winnie Wag and then she married and her name became Winnie Pring (-; Honest. Val x