DENIAL

By Basanti

Mon, 13 Mar 2017
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She says she does not love me

Yet I see love in her eyes.

I know the denial is a lie

'Cause she submits to me.



She is silent, often silent

and I long to hear what

rings in her mind

But when she flashes a smile

I go deaf

to the music of my own heart.



She says she does not love me

Yet she is in my arms

I know the denial is a lie

as long as she be with me.

Certificate 12
Poem

Comments

Submitted by G.A.Grim on

Nice poem, the wording seems a lil off at times, but it could just be me. I especially enjoyed the second stanza.

 

Submitted by Basanti on

Thank you for your feedback. Hope to have you critique my other pieces as well. Thanks.

 

Submitted by celticman on

denial is a lie, we often don't ask why. 

 

Submitted by Basanti on

Its a sweet lie in this case.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I also like the second stanza. If you're looking for feedback, I'd suggest changing 'a lot silent' for 'often silent'

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Submitted by Basanti on

Thank you so much for your suggestion. I made the change. Appreciate your feedback. :-)