A Glass of Water

Cherry

By Bee

Tue, 27 May 2014
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13 comments
 

I dreamt of a glass of water
and woke up thirsty.

I dreamt of a laden table
fit for a king who invited me  
to dine with him, 
and woke up hungry.

I dreamt of an open window
where the wind blows like a friend 
who tends and soothes,
and woke up with a flaming fever. 

I dreamt of a smile in the grey 
of the sky, interrupting the clouds, 
your glistening eyes 
accepting my foolish reply 
to your plaintive request, 
and woke up lonely.

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Comments

Submitted by jeand on

HI Bee,

Beautifully written with a very poignant sentiment. These days mostly I dream of being desperate to find a loo, and then I realise that it isn't a dream. Not very poetic.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Jean. 

Well that's killed the mood! ;-)

I know that dream - I have a vivid and unfortunate memory of my nan saying, 'stop drinking water, it's too late for that - you'll wet the bed!' To which I indignantly replied, 'Of course I won't wet the bed, I'm twelve years old. I've never done that!' Then that night I dreamt I was desperate for a wee and was so relieved to find the toilet, only it wasn't. She was nice about it, but couldn't resist telling me, ' I told you so.' even though it was her who put the idea into my brain. 

 

 

Thank you for your comments. I'm really pleased you liked the poem.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

That last verse seems tantalizing – what is she/you troubled about in the relationship/conversation? hope waking manages to put the worry to rest?! I suppose it is all up to the reader to imagine? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, Rhiannon.

You took it as it was intended.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Oh wow, cherries! Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by a102866 on

I agree with the synopsis of your poem. Day dreams rarely meld into the real world. A worthy poem. Enjoy your cherry juice!

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks a102866. 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Ah...day-dreaming, Bee - has to be one of my favourite pastimes, and this, one of my many favourites of yourssmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Tina - for your comment and for the smile.

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Excellent in the way you lead the reader into the thoughts of a lonely person. I think many people can identify with this, but few could express it in such a beautiful way.

Good work

Ed

 

Submitted by Bee on

What a really nice thing to say. Thank you, Ed.

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Bee,

Another great poem from you.  Your poems always make me think They are so subtle and  I love mulling over the way your words are  chosen and arranged as with the last line of each stanza turning the previous lines on their head.  Super,  smashing, great!

Moya.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Moya. 

I've just seen your comments here. Such nice things to say - thank you so much. 

Bee