My First Love

Cherry

By Bee

Wed, 18 Dec 2013
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17 comments
 

I learnt to tie my laces

off David when I was four

and he was five.

 

Patient and clever -

how he smiled -

that sunny child.

 

I'd never known a boy

as handsome

in all my life (till then).

 

He could tie a bow - that boy

was fine and I

never forgot him,

 

he taught me how to tie my shoes.

They were smart and brown

like chocolate - and David.

 

Wouldn't it be funny

if he remembered me? I doubt

he does, but David, for the record,

 

I remember sunshine every time

I tie a bow.

Thank you.

 

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Comments

Submitted by Tipp Hex on

awww...

Tipp Hex

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi photon.

Your 'awww' is very much appreciated. 

Thank you,

Bee

Submitted by Cake-queen on

So sweet, love it. 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Cake,

glad you liked it. Thank you for telling me.

Bee

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Wouldn't it be great if David was on ABCtales with a pseudonym?! I really hope he remembers you with sunshine too. cool

 

Submitted by Bee on

A pseudonym - ooh, I wonder who it could be? Seriously though, I don't think he would remember me. I was just a silly kid that couldn't tie my laces. But I really liked your reply - thank you, Catherine.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Nice to have happy memories aired here! You always write with a good flow and economy of words, Bee  –  a bit like Tina, but your stiles and content are obviously very individual.
This brought back memories of a little neighbour when I was very young – I think there was a play marriage ceremony which ended in tears and crossness. For a long time we had a photo of him - we had moved - he had lovely smile too, minus his front teeth!
Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Rhiannon, what you said about flow and economy makes me happy, and if it reminded you in any way of Tina's work, that makes me happy, too. 

Your story of your little friend and the possible wedding is so sweet and funny. I think it was the photo that got me - 'minus his front teeth'. Perhaps you could write about it. Possible title - 'My First Wedding'. 

Bee

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on

I would not be surprised if he does remember. Good poem.

Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Bee on

You think he might? That would be nice.

Glad you liked it.

Thank you, Richard, for letting me know.

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

I'm with the rest on this one Bee.  Lovely!

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, scratch,

that's really nice of you.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

To the editor who picked cherries,

thank you for reading. 

Much appreciated,

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

This is gorgeous, Bee. The way you address it to him, as though he can hear, makes it all the more special.

 

Submitted by Bee on

That's so nice.

Thank you, Vera.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

I love slushy love poems,  so I was drawn to this poem straight away.  I can see why you have

so many comments,  because it hold a memory for so many people.

Hope you have a great Christmas and a prosperous New Year.

Best Wishes,

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

And the very best to you too, Jenny. 

Thank you for your lovely comments. Really pleased you liked it.

Bee