Barbed wire scars
By Beeme
Sun, 07 Aug 2011
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My eyes dred the darkness
fall back in time
to the beat of drums.
I lie in your arms,
you remind me of a time before
these barbed wire patterns
edged into my skin, defined me.
The curve of your back
arches a trent, my hands retreat
surrender to the past.
A constant reminder hits me like a bullet, all all of this time
the map of my smile,
marks the scale of war.
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Great collab, guys! You've
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Great collab, guys! You've got a lot of beautiful imagery packed into this piece. Just caught a typo - it should be 'dread' ;-)
Magic xxx
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Much enjoyed, Beeme and I
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Much enjoyed, Beeme and I agree with Magic.
Just a suggestion, but in the last line of the first stanza 'etched' into my skin, might be better than 'edged'.
Tina xx
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