Love me
By Beeme
Wed, 18 Nov 2009
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I whisper “please love me”
you turn around look at me but
don't hear.
I lower my hands and try again.
“Could.. do you think you could
love me?”
You look at me,
stare straight into my clumsy eyes
replacing the clumsy smile that
usually appears at your sight.
“I don't know what is this?”
I smile and send a missile to my
heart dislodging the feelings
completely.
“I'm Joking” I smile at the
elaborateness of my lie.
“ How could you take me
seriously?”
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New Beeme Hi1' Very good all
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New Beeme
Hi1'
Very good all of it.
love can be used in
so many ways, we want it to be said
when it's not we wonder why.then
if they don't say always believe
things gone wrong, not treated
way we should be.Do you agree.
children say get what they want sometimes.
Where back on our feet again.
Hope your well and
everything is
going ok for you.
julie x
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Hi, Love you, love your
Hi,
Love you, love your poems. I'd drop a couple of redundant words from the first stanza,
I whisper “please love me”
you turn around look at me but
don't hear
What do you think?
Nick
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new Beeme Wow! well done on
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new Beeme
Wow! well done on the cherry!
so pleased.
julie x
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