message from space
By Beeme
Sun, 18 Apr 2010
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When you visit love - flashing electric
blue like the stars in the sky. Here, but
somehow far away from my grasp.
I dream of your silhouette leaving my room
and morning arriving, all too soon. I see no
more kisses mailed from heaven.
When the stars are dull and the sky huge
and uncertain, I search for a glimmer of hope.
Above in the untraced sky, untarnished from
the cycle of love, drawing, undressing, rubbing
out, colouring in. You close your eyelids-
blind to the passion I desire.
You whisper “I'll call you later” and leave my
world once again, orbiting the space inbetween
us.
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This is just lovely,
This is just lovely, captures the exquisite pain of unrequeited love.
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Love these lines,
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love these lines, Beeme:
'When the stars are dull and the sky huge
and uncertain, I search for a glimmer of hope.'
and
'Above in the untraced sky, untarnished from
the cycle of love, drawing, undressing, rubbing
out, colouring in.'
Can't say it enough, but I LOVE your love poetry ;)
Magic xxx
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"the passion I desire." well
"the passion I desire." well I guess it does make sense oddly enough &&
By the way your enter button or left-click must have got stuck I think rather do something about it I can imagine it frustrates the abc guys this kind of thing.
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Wonderfully evocative
Wonderfully evocative portrayal of that space between people that I suppose becomes accentuated the more you care about them. The line breaks seem fine to me (not sure what Nolan is concerned about - perhaps they appear differently on different machines).
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Ah the space between us...
Permalink Submitted by Anna Marie on
Ah the space between us... Sometimes it's so painful.
Thank you for this. Quite thought provoking.
Anna xx
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Thank you very much Beeme,
Thank you very much Beeme, your encouragement means a lot ;)
Nolan &&
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Ah I so much like nearly all
Ah I so much like nearly all your poems now Beeme! You must have a lovely mind!
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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Ah :D good! am very glad xx
Ah :D good! am very glad xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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