One Day
By Beeme
Tue, 26 Jul 2011
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One day
you’ll find that
polaroid shot of us.
You’ll notice the faint;
ghost-like, tyre tracked
skin, belonging to me.
Marvel and ponder at
how bodies are left behind.
You’ll study the curve
of my neck, which could
have been pristine porcelain,
but was damaged by your
contact.
You’ll trace the
microscopic love-bites
your trade mark lips
left- follow the
purple-pink bruises,
moth shaped leaping
from your angry, love
drunk hands, threatening
to contain their delicate wings.
You’ll see-
the weight of your love
tattooed across my skin.
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I love the last two lines.
Permalink Submitted by cormacru999 on
I love the last two lines. so good.
Nicholas Schoonbeck
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This is a frightfully clever
This is a frightfully clever poem. If Fatboy says it's good then it's probably spectacularly good, since he knows a thing or two about verse.
You offered up a novella-worth of detail in this self-contained gem - a whole life story and you did it through understatement. What you meticulously omitted is as important as what you shared with the reader.
This poem is truly something special!
barryj1
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Truly haunting, Beeme. Well
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Truly haunting, Beeme. Well done on a successful reworking!
Magic xxx
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There's one thing more. I
There's one thing more. I have no idea how old you are (not that it really matters), but if you have any recollection of the heady psychodelic sixties when everyone read and treasured poetry, a poem this good would probably have been picked up by some publisher five minutes after it hit the street and anthologized.
Now I'm totally through.
barryj1
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