first poem not great

Well if this is your first poem you've got real potential as your experience and practise grows. I really quite like this piece although romance poetry is not something that I would actively seek out.  A couple of observations if I may?

Give the poem a title - it deserves that much at least!

Second thing that I would recommend is not to start each new line with a capital letter (first stanza).  You shift to not doing that from stanza two to the end.

I would not use a lower case I (i) for a first person personal pronoun.  I know that is vogue in some sections of the poetry world but in my opinion it looks lazy or sloppy or both - stick to the more standard capital (I).

The last line of the first stanza should be revised to either:

'in a blanket in the dark'

or

'in a blanket of dark'

I'd be concerned about the repetition of 'me' in the second stanza too.  Try to find a way round this - I love the shards and fragments imagery though build on that aspect of the poem if you can.

There are a couple of other things that I noticed but maybe I've said enough already.  Please remember that this is only my personal and subjective opinion on what is a sound poem that you should be really pleased with.

Well done and welcome to ABCtales by the way!

I don't the writing expirience, or self confidence, of scratch to give that level of feedback. But I loved your peom, keep it up. Welcome to the site govna.

thought this was great chainslaw, v lovely, particularly 'I fall in love /with each splinter of you'. great work.