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By cormacru999

Sun, 24 Jul 2011
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I survived on oranges and hope
but I have encased my heart
in steel & ice
yet dreams still crack the case
owls & whiporwills sing you to sleep
& never again will my skin touch yours
I've swallowed those dreams
allowed my spirit to wander
& wonder why?
you've grown sunburnt and cold
while I put on layers of stone
to become more mountain than myth
I was fearless with you
now just haunted
by a whirlwind of things I can't have
you covered my lines and shadowed your heart
& all the things we dreamed can never be
in the end,
I am without words.

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Submitted by RachelPatricia on
'you've grown sunburnt and cold while I put on layers of stone to become more mountain than myth' - love these lines, c999 :) In the second line, do you mean 'encased'? Lovely poem, hauntingly beautiful and very much enjoyed :) Rachel xx

Submitted by Beeme on
I really like this one, I agree with rachel it's hauntingly beautiful :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by cormacru999 on
yes I did mean encased thank you catching that. Its a fresh break up so the lines come easy right now. sigh.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by Highhat on
You certainly have a wonderful way with words Mr Poet- truly inspiring- thank you hope you get over your break-up soon- so painful- ;)Pia

Submitted by cormacru999 on
Me 2! Its the worst one yet. I think from now on its just better to be single and focus on things like writing and drawing. thank you for your words of encouragement. Its a blessing right now.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
There are some stunning lines in this, I love the references to nature and how you add mystery and ambiguity to your poetry. You had me at the first line!

 

Submitted by cormacru999 on
thank you. I don't write poetry as often as I'd like but this one came quickly. I'm focusing on a fantasy book right now, which I will post here.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by cormacru999 on
well its kind of awkward convincing a judge you're too mentally ill to work, especially when you seem as functional as I do. I do really well alone tho - It's best if I'm just by myself most of the time, which of course makes it hard to work with others. the sticking point seemed to be why couldn't I go work sanitation again like I once did for a month because its minimal interaction with others. I don't know if you've ever worked on the back of a dump truck for a living but its one of the worst jobs in the world. My hats off to those men that do it, but I won't be doing that for a living. I would rather write, which also takes minimal interaction with others. thank you for commenting and asking about court. Its kind of you to pay attention and that goes a long way with me. I saw your update about your own case, and I hope that works out in your favor. I've read a lot of your comments on various forums and they are always interesting and well spoken. I think we've had a lot of very similar life experiences, and it seems to have made you a better man. Nicholas.

Nicholas Schoonbeck