Nothing personal, you understand ..

By denni1

Tue, 12 Nov 2013
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So fortunate and grateful, l
Have friends to laugh with, even cry
However, one sticks out a mile
Because he makes me think and smile

He's very tall compared to me
With floppy hair, nice face, great teeth
I love to hear his tales of woe
Mostly, the women he's let go

Because he's special through and through
I hate to share this thought with you
A makeover is what he needs
To help him do the 'dirty deed'

'It's what's on the inside' people quote
However, scruffiness puts doubt
Into a pretty, sexy lass
Who's spent the time to look her best

Alex, would you please take note
You are a gorgeous looking bloke
However, you must smarten up
To help achieve the goal, a fuck ..

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Submitted by publicenemy93 on

I think this is pretty well written. Some of the lines don't really flow that well and the second last stanza doesn't rhyme at all. However , it is a well written poem with a good idea. And I can see from this that you are well able to write.   

Submitted by denni1 on

They flow, perhaps you ain't gettin' how l write .. ?!

Submitted by alexwritings on

Great poem!!!!!

 

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Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Your poetry is very 'spoken word' (so is a lot of mine). I hope you get out there and do some in front of a mic. This one is perfect for it          Elsie

Submitted by denni1 on

Thanks, you guys xx big hug ..

Submitted by geegogs1 on

Big 'Eck doesn't need a make over! He's a beezer just as he is. I love this poem, Denise. you're a beezer too x

Submitted by denni1 on

We we're chatting, and he asked me to! Akchewally ..

Submitted by geegogs1 on

What did he ask you?x

Submitted by denni1 on

Give him a personal shop/makeover ..