Wish you were here
By Ed Crane
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An invitation from an old friend
to stay a while in Las Palmas
visiting old haunts again
walking Las Canteras
viewing Tenerife
Atlantic's breeze
Drago trees
much too
brief
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I liked that. The picture
I liked that. The picture drawn, but also, the form seems to suit it as I like the lines being self-contained so emphasising the thoughts being each slightly shorter, and the simple rhyme making the last word an emphasised finale. Rhiannon
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I feel like I'm there.
I feel like I'm there.
"Star Wars" popped into my head when I saw this. Maybe a scrolling version? It would break the nine line, nine syllable rule, but it would be impressive.
Parson Thru
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Hi Ed.
Hi Ed.
I was never an aficionado. I leant more towards Close Encounters. I remember the lengthy foreword at the beginning of the first film. I see you've changed to left justified. I think it was london_calling79 who set the standard with his almost straight hypotenuse. Have we changed the spelling of that?
Is Arucas in the north? I quite liked the ron miel in GC, but it's probably a bit sweet in reality. I've seen what I think are dead cicadas here recently. I'm surprised how big they are. You should take up the offer.
Parson Thru
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