An idea on the premature death of ideas.


By IsntLifeBrilliant
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Over the ramshackle doorway
to the foetid domicile in which we, the meek, house our ideas
you scrawl a red cross,
as though charged with protecting a town from plague.
And despite how hard we may have tried
to rack our brains and produce a thing that might flourish delicately
amidst the noise of so many voices;
your red, ragged cross is dripping there
plain as the nose you look down
and the message is clear;
“Abandon hope all ye who would entertain these ideas
For I have seen to it that they might die so soon as they were born.”
This is why so many of us hated school.
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This is a strong idea and
This is a strong idea and imaginatively conveyed. This line feels as though it should be linked with the preceding line with a comma, rather than being a stand alone statement:
As though charged with protecting a town from plague.
Only my thoughts, it's a lovely piece anyway.
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Love the purpose
I read that fiction is all about the paragraph, and poetry is all about the line. You did a great job at being purposful with your placement of every word and space. I really appreciate the delicate purpose of every statement, and also the creativity put into this piece. Great job.
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