Love, Like a Cold Lamb Sandwich

Apart from that simile in the entry, J, that high prior heels, and a few shop worn cliches, you've a fine poem in the make here IMVHO. But that being prudently pushed aside, and considering only your exit and title here, and with this in mind... "I seem to know all the cliches, but not how to put them together in a believable way. Or else these stories are terrible and grandiose precisely because all the cliches intertwine in an unrealistic way and you can't disentangle them. But when you actually live a cliche, it feels brand new, and you are unashamed." ― Umberto Eco ...perhaps changing the finale to, 'Love isn't always a Coke, ' and the title to The Real Thing', would make it quiet spectacular? Just thinking out loud..which I do quiet often when I like a piece.

I love them cold lamb sandwiches! Pulenty o salt. I also love this, J xx

Ahhh, fear not, J, Umberto always comes to an authors/esses rescue: “Two cliches make us laugh. A hundred cliches move us because we sense dimly that the cliches are talking among themselves while celebrating a reunion.”

1st poem of yours I have read Jolono seems as your stories are so good I could'nt resist reading - glad I did, very good. Cheers S :)

You 'don't do poetry' exceptionally well, J xx

I like cold lamb too. You do well with poetry Jolono- do continue. Very different to your prose- I definitely like both. ;)Pia

who can resist love like a cold lamb sandwhich? good stuff.

Hi jolono, firstly can I say I love the title of this piece. it's quite frightening how especially when we're young, we can think we're in love, but then discover that it was a mistake. But as always it's life's experience that teaches us real love, then we know when it comes along. Loved the comparison of the lamb sandwich and love. Thanks for sharing this. Sorry I know I got to it a bit late. Jenny.

Aaah! now I see. Thanks for explaining, that makes a lot of sense. Jenny.