Dare not doubt

By Kahdai

Sun, 28 Mar 2010
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Pacing past the window,
knowing you are out there
I wonder if you have forgotten me.

Am I somewhere in your conscience?
or just here looking at
all your pictures of her?

Whenever I am not there
I see you are on your phone.
You say you are just friends
& I dare not doubt you,
I know I would fall apart.

Holding it all in me
almost afraid to hold you
for further breaking
my heart.

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Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I'm really glad you decided to post this one, Kahdai! I love its brutal honesty and as a reader you can really feel the narrator's pain. Well done on this beautiful poem ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi there, Kahdai. I enjoyed this...just a couple of minor points. End of line 4, do you mean 'consciousness'? And Line 9 - should be 'friends'. As Magic says, this a beautiful poem. Well done;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Magic, don't feel pain it's all ok now & thanks for helping me ;) . Tina, I meant conscience thanks, good I wouldn't have looked it up, all spell check kept saying confidence! Real people are much better understanding me. Thankyou both glad you like it. xxx

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