A simple winter morning

By kirsten

Wed, 24 Oct 2012

2 comments

As icy cold as a big
White polar bears nose,
Glistening In the north pole snow.
Wet from the cold blue sea
And as black as a
Poppy seed.

Permalink Submitted by Highhat on Wed, 2012-10-24 19:31

I agree with Bear- strong images- but take a look at your punctuation- too many commas and semi colons keep writing ;)Pia

Permalink Submitted by kirsten on Wed, 2012-10-24 19:40

thanks! Poem was done for an english starter excersise so not a proper poem...well, to me any way! Thanks for your input Lucy x

Lucy Fry