Anemone
By ladylazarus
Tue, 08 Apr 2008
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Let love flow and it will always come back to you,
she said to me.
Well, I have love to give,
but it is trapped somewhere dark in my belly and can't be free.
I think I locked it there once, in winter,
to keep it warm and clean.
Sometimes, at night, it's tendrils reach for you,
but shrink back, recoil, like an anemone.
It curls through murk and brine,
flower-like, predatory.
It listens to you breathe and waits for you to reach for me.
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I was taken in by the
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I was taken in by the mention of speed poetry; something I love to do myself. I liked it; raw, short and quick. Just let it flow! :)
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I personally wouldn't
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I personally wouldn't develop this poem anymore, I like it as it is. I used to be totally against meticulous re-writes after re-writes but it does improve your stuff.
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