The Beast

By LKilby

Mon, 05 Jul 2010
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[The] - Efforts to subdue it.
[Beast] - versus man, epic finale.
[Is] - it all over?
[Within] - our hearts, the key to victory.
[You] - hold the key, now find the lock.

[Release] - Yourself from this vicious battle.
[The] - exit is found in the bloodless spot.
[Damned] - are we, but you can be saved.
[Beast] - brings you down, soar your way up!
[Burden] - it is, but shrug the weight and fly.

[Listen] - We speak the truth to you.
[To] - escape, you must turn and flee.
[Our] - voices are fading, heed our warnings.
[Ghostly] - visions of battles past.
[Voices] - In your head fight the beast.

*Efforts at a new discipline, please remember that in any constructive criticism :D*

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Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Very original structure and style, Liam! I've been experimenting with brackets myself recently (see 'Shadowless') - although in a different way. I always appreciate poets who like to have fun with their writing and try new things, well done ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by LKilby on
Ahh, I've already read that particular piece Magic, I thoroughly enjoyed it :D I also appreciate new styles, I find that conventional poetry tends to get a bit boring after so long, so mixing it up a little is fun :) Thanks for the praise! (And for reading so many of my pieces!) Liam ~

Submitted by Cherry Stone on
epic finale!! ;P