Breakfast 'Chez Nous'

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Sat, 02 Sep 2023
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18 comments
 

Breakfast time is mayhem at our house.
Mum is making a 'full English' for dad;
she is huffing and puffing because, while
the bacon is happily sizzling in the pan,
the egg won't play ball: with a splash
the yolk breaks and has to be scrambled.

The twins are claiming “it's mine”. Both
grab the carton of those cereals that go
crackle and pop but neither gets his wish.
The container tears with a rending sound
and the contents drop down on the floor.

Dad is about to intervene but – ring ring -
the doorbell goes and he runs to open it.
There is a ping on his oldest son's phone
who looks at it and shuts it with a snap.
His girlfriend has given him the heave-ho
and he feels like his life is crashing down.

The wafting smell of the cooking sausages
has reached the nostrils of the hungry dog
who suddenly wakes up and wags his tail.
His plaintive cry “Ouuuuuwwwww!” 
is echoed by the equally famished pussycat
who joins him with a screeching “ Meoow”

Breakfast Chez Nous is always the same.
It's frenetic at times but we cope alright;
If we hear one of the kids saying “Ouch”
we know one of them pinched the other
but when it's followed by a lot of giggling
it is a sign they're having a ripping time.

 

© Luigi Pagano 2023

Certificate U
Poem
Mutevoli pensieri
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Another very good IP response (if a little noisy) - thank you Luigi!

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Noisily and lively, one would hope, Claudine. 

Luigi x,  with grateful thanks for the cherries.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Stuffed full of onomatopaeic words! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

As the words were entering my head, I thought of creating a domestic comedy situation. This is the result. Unlike the chaotic goings-on in this fictional household, I am calm and relaxed in a peaceful atmosphere. Thanks for your welcome feedback, Rhiannon

.Luigi x

P.S. We were both quickly off the mark, I see

 

 

Submitted by Turlough on

An onomatopoeia frenzy! Grand stuff Luigi.

When I'm having my breakfast the only onomatopoeia you'd ever get a hint of would be the slurp of the coffee. Boring perhaps, but necessary!

Turlough

Submitted by Ed Crane on

but you definely nailed it.

This piece is so full of action, wordcraft and humour. I was almost breathless by the time I'd finished reading it.

Good candidate for golden cherries IMHO

Well done Luigi one of your great gems.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Too kind, Ed. I cannot resist the challenge of the weekly Inspiration Point which was a bit out of the ordinary this time. Had to think hard to come up with something that made some sense. I always like to inject some humour into my writing and I used it to maximum effect. So glad you liked it.

Best, Luigi

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

We seem to have something in common, Turlough  Coffee is a necessity. I never tire of it. Anticipating a cup of mouthwatering espresso, I smack my lips.

Luigi

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Great Luigi,

you've created a noisy famiy scene that's perfect for the I. P.

Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Jenny, if you think that that was noisy imagine what it would have sounded if I had mentioned that there was also a teenage daughter listening to a pop song on the radio at full blast. laugh

Luigi xx

 

Submitted by Mark Say on

You've made me hungry.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

That's OK Mark, there's room for a guest.

Cheers. Luigi

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

My kind of girl- the way to a man's heart is through his stomach, and breakfast is the most important meal.

Cheers Luigi! Tom

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Absolutely, Tom, There is nothing like a good breakfast to set one up for the day. Bon Appetit. 

Kuigi

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

I have wittnessed that early morning mayhem too.  Loved this one Luigi

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

It's bound to happen in a big family. Pleased you liked my chaotic rendering. and thanks for your feedback, Graham.

Luigi

 

Submitted by Nolan on

My mother cooked up a storm but you should see the aftermath & Nilan

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I can well imagine the scene, Nolan. The breakfast room can look like a battlefront especially when children are concerned,