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Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Sun, 16 Dec 2018
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12 comments
 

We are eternally circling
on this carousel of life
you ahead, running,
I behind, chasing
but unable to reach you.

The gap between us
is now so unbridgeable
that this is not so much
a merry-go-round
as a vicious circle.

© Luigi Pagano 2018

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I think this is my favourite of the IP responses so far - well done!

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Very excited at receiving the coveted cherry and reading your nice words for which I thank you, Claudine.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Great poem for the I P Luigi, yes

Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

The Muse was kind enough to inspire the right ideas, Jenny. So glad you liked it.

Luigi xx

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

An interesting little composition, Luigi, and left me wondering who is really chasing who? and why not stop trying! No ideas on this word have come to me yet, though I've been wondering if we had it once before a long time ago? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Rhiannon, the same thought occured to me (great minds think alike) and it is obvious who the chaser is at the moment but the situation is always fluctuating and although not a race it is an incentive to produce good stuff,
It is quite possible that I.P.s are repeated over time but it's difficult to remember them all.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Luigi, you may not believe it but that implication of my comment only occurred to me afterwards, actually!! Don't forget there are other reasons for writing and feeling satisfied apart from fruit! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Of course there are, Rhiannon, and that's what I was trying to convey with my reply.
By and large an author knows how worthwhile his/her piece is but I suppose that a cherry award can reinforce that belief, As the saying goes "don't look a gift horse in the mouth" unless it is a trojan one, of course.

Got any ideas yet?

Luigi x 

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Courting & mating. Doves making love.

Timeless. Brilliant.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Many thanks.

Best, Luigi

 

Submitted by agnosticnun on

This is really lovely, with that sharp turn at the end. 

Kristi

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Kristi, your feedback is warm;y received.

Luigi x