Closing The Gap

By luigi_pagano

Tue, 07 Jan 2014

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4 comments

This was written for a group exercise.
We were given random lines from an unseen poem and were asked to incorporate them in a composition of our own.
The "borrowed" text appears in bold characters.

Am I walking towards myself
as the mirror seems to suggest
or is the reflection an illusion
and in reality I'm running away
to leave the nightmare behind?
A fragment of flint from a stone
in the wall of the white house
where I live, lies on the ground;
lifeless, like my broken heart.
But happy memories from the past
go some way to closing the gap
between hope and utter despair.

Comments

This poem is very well done,

Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on Tue, 2014-01-07 15:36

This poem is very well done, Luigi. A very nice balance reminds us despair can be overcome.

Richard L. Provencher

Much obliged for your kind

Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on Tue, 2014-01-07 16:13

Much obliged for your kind feedback, Richard. Much appreciated thanks.

An interesting exercise,

Permalink Submitted by Rhiannonw on Tue, 2014-01-07 21:09

An interesting exercise, Luigi, and you have used the so different phrases to somehow connect up, and touch on what is going on to make the reader wonder and think. As Richard says, the last 3 lines give encouragement. Rhiannon

I found the exercise

Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on Wed, 2014-01-08 09:24

I found the exercise challenging and tackled it as I would a jigsaw puzzle, trying to fit in the pieces which were clearly visible - i.e. the given text - into an empty board with the purpose of creating a coherent image. I can see from your response, and Richard's, that the poem came across well, with its hopeful message. Many thanks for reading and commenting, Rhiannon.

Luigi