The Experiment

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Tue, 28 May 2024
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I tried writing poems
that do not rhyme
but did not succeed,
I failed every time.

The problem I have
in tackling free verse
is that they are short,
maybe even too terse

I've met some poets
who said that it's easy
but to be wary that
the ode is not cheesy.

Write in the manner
of a man who talks
of the pleasure derived
from morning walks;

describe how to climb
the highest mountain
and drinking water
from a nearby fountain;

say that you are keen
on greater conservation,
just make it all sound 
like a conversation.

The advice I was given
was of little or no avail 
as on every occasion
the experiment did fail.

 

© Luigi Pagano 2024

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Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

No failures that I can see, Luigi! Your poems always flow so well, and rhyming is such an art.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Thanks for your kind words, Jane. I find it easier to write rhymed poetry; it is second nature to me but I have also indulged in free verse, particularly in earlier years. So it's not the case of teaching old dogs new tricks; it's a matter of preference.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

I can sympathise Luigi, being myself 'hard wired' for rhyme, and I'm only now finding some facility in free verse. That said, we should just follow our muse.

Dougie Moody

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Very true, Dougie, but I find that often I am chasing the Muse, rather than following her.

Best, Luigi 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I think you must have a special kind of brain, Luigi, which holds not only the meaning for a vast quantity of words but also several rhymes for each. I wonder if you had a brain scan, it would show this quality of being able to make these connections, which makes reading your poems such fun.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Di. I suppose that my brain is like a sponge that absorbs what my wife used to call 'useless information'.It is that kind of trivia that enables me to churn out poems, hopefully entertaining. Your feedback is very much appreciated.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by memphis on

I would love to write free verse. But I always seem to write long poems. Maybe I will give them a practice. Your words inspire me.

William E Alexander

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hello William E Alexander. Nice to meet you.
It is said that practice makes perfect so perhaps that's what we should be doing.
Many thanks for reading and commenting.

Best wishes, Luigi
 

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

They say insanity is doing the same experiment over and over and each time expecting a different result, although I want to maintain one writes in for yourself firstly.

They asked Edison how he felt failing an attempt to make a lightbulb 99 times he said no he didn't fail 99 times, he found 99 ways that don't work.

All the best Luigi! Tom

 

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

If at first you don't succeed, try and try again.

Cheers.

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Gary Player our internationally famous brilliant golf player and a great gentleman said, "I have never been afraid of failure, only of failing to try and try again".

He was chosen South Africa's greatest sportsman of the Century.

And Cheers! Tom

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

yes