An Unexpected Response

By luigi_pagano

Wed, 16 Mar 2022
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I had a Campari,
and she a gin and tonic.
What happened next
was quite ironic.

I didn't expect
she would disparage
my serious offer
of a stable marriage.

Almost reticent,
her reply was laconic.
In fact, it sounded
rather sardonic.

Our relationship
had to be platonic
even though I said
it should be hedonic.

My amorous pursuit
had been so chronic
that in the end
I felt catatonic.

 

© Luigi Pagano 2022

 

 

 

 

Certificate U
Poem
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Humour

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

'-ic' words have a nice bounce to them! Quite an aid to humour.

I remember my mother's lodger having teasing fun with her when she was horrifed when he showed her that her dog had come back from the kennels with tics. He teased her by bringing in 'tic' words all the time, and the culmination was 'dogmatic' (dog-ma-tic)! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Rhiannon, that play on words of your mother's lodger reminded me of something similar I tried in one of my old poems, mercifully lost. It was at the time when the musical "Cats" came out and I attempted to use words like cat-alogue, cat-apult, cat-aclism , etc. I seem to remember the experiment wasn't successful.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Turlough on

Looking back to the days when I was married, I would say that catatonic is a very appropriate word to describe the experience.

Turlough

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hello Turlough.
I seem to recall that the exertion experienced during the chase was actually greater than the physical activity that I  think you are referring to. smiley

Cheers, Luigi